Is it too long?
Is is too repetitive?
Is it too trite?
Is it too perfect?
What do you think? The most important thing is I don't want to have it coming off too corny or melodramatic or overly nostalgic. Just an impression.
The music isn't what I want ultimate. It think I might go with something similar in feel though more electronic to match the static feeling. Like Daft Punk meets Simon and Garfunkel!